1. 我的学校(My School)

My School
I go to a primary school. My school is big and clean. There are many classrooms and a big playground. I like my school very much. We have English, maths, and art. My favourite subject is English. My teachers are kind and helpful. I play with my friends at break time. I love my school!

我的学校
我就读一所小学。我的学校又大又干净。有很多教室和一个大操场。我非常喜欢我的学校。我们上英语、数学和美术课。我最喜欢的科目是英语。我的老师很和蔼,也很乐于帮助人。课间我和朋友们一起玩耍。我爱我的学校!

老师点评:
这篇作文结构清晰,使用了简单的句型和基础词汇,非常适合小学低年级学生模仿。重点词汇如“primary school”“playground”“favourite subject”都是常见考点词。建议学生背诵并尝试替换关键词,如把“English”换成“maths”,练习不同版本。

重点划出:
primary school(小学)
playground(操场)
favourite subject(最喜欢的科目)
kind and helpful(和蔼且乐于助人)

 

2. 我的教室(My Classroom)

My Classroom
This is my classroom. It is bright and tidy. There are twenty desks and chairs. We have a blackboard, a teacher’s desk, and a bookshelf. On the wall, there are pictures and our homework. I sit near the window. I like my classroom because it is warm and nice.

我的教室
这是我的教室。它明亮又整洁。有二十张课桌和椅子。我们有黑板、讲台和书架。墙上贴着图画和我们的作业。我坐在窗户旁边。我喜欢我的教室,因为它温暖又舒适。

老师点评:
这篇作文注重细节描写,使用了方位介词“near the window”和描述性形容词“bright”“tidy”“warm”。适合学生学习如何用英语描述空间和环境。句型简单但完整,是写作入门的好范例。

重点划出:
tidy(整洁的)
bookshelf(书架)
on the wall(在墙上)
because 引导原因句,提升句子逻辑性

3. 我的老师(My Teacher)

My Teacher
My teacher is Miss Li. She teaches us English. She is tall and has long black hair. She always smiles and speaks clearly. She is patient and kind. We learn many new words every week. She plays games with us. I like her very much.

我的老师
我的老师是李老师。她教我们英语。她个子高,留着长长的黑发。她总是微笑,说话很清楚。她很有耐心,也很和蔼。我们每周都学很多新单词。她和我们一起做游戏。我非常喜欢她。

老师点评:
这篇作文通过外貌和性格描写展现人物特点,使用了“teaches”“smiles”“plays”等动词,体现日常活动。适合练习“第三人称单数”动词变化。建议学生模仿此结构写其他人物,如“my mother”或“my friend”。

重点划出:
teaches(第三人称单数)
patient(有耐心的)
clearly(清楚地,副词用法)
✅ 使用“and”连接多个形容词,增强表达力

 

4. 我的一天在学校(My Day at School)

My Day at School
I go to school at 8 o’clock. Classes start at 8:20. I have four lessons in the morning. At 10:00, we have a break. I play with my friends. At 12:00, I eat lunch at school. In the afternoon, we have two more lessons. School finishes at 3:30. I go home and do my homework. I like my school day.

我在学校的一天
我八点去学校。八点二十分开始上课。上午有四节课。十点我们休息。我和朋友们一起玩。十二点,我在学校吃午饭。下午还有两节课。三点三十分放学。我回家做作业。我喜欢我在学校的一天。

老师点评:
这篇作文按时间顺序组织内容,逻辑清晰,是典型的“记叙一日”写作模板。使用了多个时间表达,如“at 8 o’clock”“at 10:00”,有助于学生掌握时间状语的用法。动词如“start”“have”“play”“finish”都是基础高频词。

重点划出:
at + 时间点(时间表达)
have a break(课间休息)
finish(结束)
✅ 时间顺序词:first, then, next(可补充提升)

 

5. 我最喜欢的学校活动(My Favourite School Activity)

My Favourite School Activity
My favourite school activity is singing. We have music class on Fridays. Our music teacher teaches us new songs. We sing together and play the drums and piano. I feel happy when I sing. Sometimes we perform for our parents. I love music class!

我最喜欢的学校活动
我最喜欢的学校活动是唱歌。我们每周五有音乐课。我们的音乐老师教我们新歌。我们一起唱歌,还打鼓和弹钢琴。唱歌时我感到很开心。有时我们为家长们表演。我爱音乐课!

老师点评:
这篇作文聚焦“兴趣爱好”主题,使用了“favourite”“feel happy”“perform”等表达情感和活动的词汇。句型多样,包含时间状语“on Fridays”和结果表达“when I sing”。适合学生拓展写作主题。

重点划出:
favourite school activity(最喜欢的学校活动)
perform(表演)
feel happy(感到开心,情感表达)
✅ 使用“and”连接多个动作,增强节奏感

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